A Lovers' Poem
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(Venus Assigns a Task, by Giordano) |
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A young maiden kidnapped, afraid
Taken one cold night in a thieves' raid
Scared, she was of a fatal nightmare
An old woman said in comfort, "there, there"
And so begins the telling of a tale
Of a maiden, so innocent and pale
Of her undying love to an unknown god
Despite understanding that the love would be flawed
Psyche was the name of girl with a beauty so rare
Worshipped she was, for a man would never dare
To touch or marry a maiden of such grace
Sad, her parents were for the marriage that disappeared without a trace
Up, her parents went to pray to for their girl
The response that came made their stomachs curl
Cursed, Psyche was, doomed to marry a creature
All for the reason of being a beauty worthy of a feature
The curse, you see, was commanded by Venus
Betrayed by her worshippers, she hatched a plan of genius
Down, she sent Cupid, her beloved son
To kill poor Psyche, only then has Venus won
Yet once married off to a creature with great fear
Psyche came upon a place that she found so dear
All the riches and beauty she could think of
She thought "Oh my, this could be a place of love!"
Late a night after invisible helpers tend to her bath
She found walking to her bed on a laid out path
Almost fast asleep she was
But then fast awoken by an unlikely cause
Hands, she felt caress her fair skin
"Aha!" she thought, "this is him"
The man she was supposed to marry
Yet with the lights off, her thoughts were still wary
"Worry not, my dear love," he said
"I will visit you every night in this bed."
"But do not ever seek out my face,"
"Or this love will have fear take its place."
Faithful as ever, Psyche did listen
And on her days went while the sun glisten
Then news of her sisters' search for their supposedly dead sister
Had Psyche begging for time away from her mister
With great feeling did the man warn her
Her sisters would turn on her and call her by a slur
Nonetheless after much begging from his lovely wife
The man granted Psyche's wishes despite his great strife
Welcomed were Psyche's sisters into the great oasis
Feasts. gold paved roads and beautiful garden were the basis
Yet once the sisters started questioning the man's looks
Psyche lead them out fast, with gold, dressed and books
Offended, were the sisters of the youngest's cockiness
And thus they devised a plan, one quite obvious
They were to make her drunk with wine
Then ask again of her husband to catch her in a bind
Back the sisters came with the plan in motion
Yet once again Psyche's husband warned her of her sisters' veiled emotions
"Remember, tell them nothing of my face or qualities,"
"Or else you face a punishment that cannot be compared to any quantity."
Despite her husband's warnings Psyche drank the night away
And when asked of her man's features, Psyche did not remember the warning of the day
So off she went describing a man she had never seen
Leaving clues that the sister picked up because they were so keen
Once again the sisters hatched a plan
To convince poor Psyche that her husband was damned
"You see my dear sister, the only way to know,"
"Is for you to shine a light on him, even though he said to not do so."
Convinced, Psyche waited until nighttime to shed light on her man
Her first reaction, a gasp, upon his face she did scan
The husband she thought unknown was a god indeed
The son of Venus, Cupid, a man of great creed
Suddenly awaken by the candle's wax,
Appalled did Cupid seem by his wife's betraying acts
"How dare you fail the one command I gave,"
"And what, for you, I almost lead myself to an early grave?"
You see, Cupid had shot himself with an arrow
To mask his love with Psyche from Venus' vengeful sorrow
"Now that my dear love has betrayed me,"
"Off I leave, for you I never again see."
Wings aflutter, Cupid leapt into the air
Psyche, distraught and ridden with despair
Found herself lying on the ground, her heart broken
Only to realize it was by the Pan, she was awoken
Pan, the god of the wild, told her of what to do
"Seek his worship once again and your love will pursue."
Out into the world did Psyche go
Hatching a plan for her evil sisters that only true vengeance could know
Disguising herself with great pity and despair
Psyche looked upon both sisters and said,
"My god, Cupid, only wants you both,"
"All you must do is go to the mountain and say an oath."
Eagerly both the sisters did flee
Up to the mountain they went to plea
Unmet, were the sisters with great love the wanted
And to their deaths did they fall, always to be haunted
Meanwhile, Cupid was being punished by Venus
Betrayed, she felt by Cupid's keenness
To shoot himself instead of Psyche's heart
Meant he valued her love as just a start
Enraged, Venus sought out Psyche for her head
Psyche actually came to her instead
"Please let me be a part of my love's life."
"Of course you can be love," Venus said, "but not without strife."
Venus sent Psyche on a number of tasks
Only with great struggle and fight would Psyche pass
The first to separate seeds, the second to find the golden fleece
The third to fill a flask with a river's water, the fourth to bring her beauty from her niece
Furious was Venus when Psyche completed each chore
Despite Psyche's victory, "Never will you marry Cupid," Venus swore
In strife, Cupid begged of Zeus
To let him and Psyche marry, laying out a truce
Thus Zeus promised Cupid his wife
Only on the condition they had a feast to celebrate life
During the feast did Cupid and Psyche marry
Happy and Lovely did they look, their love as beautiful as fairies
To the end did the Old woman reach
The end of a story the kidnapped girl longed to reteach
Calmed down she was after a nightmare that seemed true
Yet thanks to this tale, no longer she felt blue
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Based off of Apuleius' Cupid and Psyche as translated in English by Tony Kline (2013).
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Author's Note
For my first retelling of a story, I decided to challenge myself by making a stylistic change in the writing rather than flip the story on its head. Even though the latter might be more interesting, the latter also comes easier to me because I am allowed to do whatever with the story. By changing the story into a rhyming poem, it forced me to take better care of the material while writing it in my own way. Additionally, I definitely was not planning on writing this much but I could not help but want to leave in as many details as possible in this stylistic change of the story. I had to compress and mold some more intricate parts of the story to shorten the length of the poem, which was an interesting obstacle. Nonetheless, since it was stylistic change rather than a complete revamp the story of Cupid and Psyche still comes across well with all the plot points being clear and concise (well as much as they can be in a rhyming poem). Hopefully, the poem was an easy but entertaining read despite its length.
Instead of writing a story, you made it a poem. I like the creativeness of the rhyming. It makes the poem fun, and your poem draws me into wanting to finish it. If it was me writing a rhyming poem, it would be difficult to make sure that most of the ending words rhyme. You did a great job.
ReplyDeleteI have heard of a story similar to this, but I never knew that it was actually about Cupid and his lover, Psyche. Thank you for choosing this story. Now, I know who it was about.
Belle,
ReplyDeleteWow. I love how you turned it into a poem. Whenever I read these stories, I feel like I should be writing in poem form. It was especially hard for me to turn a poem/limerick into a story because I couldn’t get words that rhymed out of my head! You did a really good job shortening the story so that it would fit in 1000 words and also fit in poem form. It is very hard to pick and choose the details that are needed and to discard the ones that are not.